How to Make a Frigid Woman

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How to Make a Frigid Woman

Postby Chelsea Duklain on Mon Sep 08, 2003 11:17 am

(I wrote this one a while back but for some reason, even though I feel it's not well written, I've always liked it. So see Bayne, I do have a dark side. :twisted: )


This day, like any other, was perfect. She dug her knees into Surrey's sides to urge her faster. She tightened her grip on the reigns and leaned down, her face nearly buried in her dark mane. The wind blew through her hair causing wild strands to sting her cheeks and eyes but she didn't care. The smile the curled her lips seemed to be permanent these days.

She cast a backwards glance to the horseman behind her. He was gaining. His horsemanship was evident. He was toying with her, allowing her to have the lead for a few short minutes before he came in for the kill. She'd be hanged if she let him catch up! She whispered in Surrey's ear and gave the reigns a firm tug, sending the horse off the path and through the low lying branches and bushes. She veered left and right, trying to lose the horseman but he was tenacious.

All her concentration and attention was on maneuvering her horse through the branches and brush at a relatively high speed. She didn't even notice the horseman had moved up alongside of her until an arm reached out to curl about her waist and give a tug, shifting her from her own horse into his lap. She yelped in surprise and clung onto his shirtfront. He slowed his horse to a canter and glanced down at her, a smug look on his devilish features.

"I can't imagine how you got it in your head that you'd actually win this time."

He was graced with a light punch into his chest. "One of these days, my love, I will best you and you will have to rid yourself of that smug, overbearing smile." The words were softened by the tone of her voice. A gloved finger reached up to lovingly trace those smug lips. "Until then, I'm the most content loser I've ever known."

They spent the afternoon picnicking on whatever they could find, exploring the surrounding forest of his family's homelands and, of course, loving one another. It was a perfect day, much like all her days had been since meeting him. She constantly thanked whatever gods were responsible for their destined meeting. She couldn't imagine a more perfect and suitable man for her. She knew they'd eventually wed, once Corbin's family realized that he loved her. They were a bit on the stubborn side but she'd win them over. If it meant keeping Corbin she'd do anything willingly. Until then, she was content just to be with him.

The sun was slipping beyond the ridge, changing the springtime shades of green odd colors. They stood by their horses, arms wrapped around one another, watching the orange, yellow and red bursts in the sky slowly fade, leaving the husky color of night in it's place.

Grudgingly they mounted their horses and began the short journey back to the manor. Everyone would be worrying soon.

He took the lead, as always, expertly assisting his horse in picking out the correct path. She followed closely behind them. Their quiet conversation as they traveled one of warmth, l and the future.

She didn't know what it was that spooked Cheron, his horse. She didn't hear anything nor see anything but suddenly Cheron gave a start and reared up on his hind legs. He tried to calm him, speaking calmly all the while pulling the reigns to control him but it was to no avail. He was wild eyed and totally out of control. Cheron lunged forward through the dense trees at a breakneck pace, his rider yelling commands and trying to hang onto the reigns the entire time.

She bolted after them on Surrey. Dodging under low lying branches and veering to avoid collisions with the dense brush. She could see them always just ahead of her but she couldn't keep up. Surrey had never been able to match Cheron in an all out race.
She'd lost them. She could hear them crashing through the underbrush in the dark but Corbin's outline was lost to her sight. It was then that she heard it. A loud, jarring thud. Much like a ripe melon hitting solid ground. Her eyes widened. By the gods, no! Her heart leapt into her throat, her breathing became quicker and more shallow as she strained to see either horse or rider.

Her eyes fell on the slumped figure near the base of a tree. His head bent back at an unnatural angle, his eyes open, staring blankly at the canopy of branches above them.

She shrieked and lunged from her horse, falling to her knees in her haste to get to him. She scurried on all fours to his side, gently cradling his broken neck with her arm, caressing his cheek and softly calling his name. Tears fell unchecked down her cheeks to moisten his tunic. She placed soft kisses on the large, bluish bruise on his forehead, the entire time telling him to hang on, help was on the way. Subconsciously, she knew it was too late but consciously, she denied it. NO! It wasn't too late! She screamed at the top of her lungs. "HELP ME! ANYONE! HEEELLLP!" Her pleas always ending with a heart wrenching sob.

She didn't know how long she'd been there. Day had not yet come but the night was nearly over. Time meant nothing. She only felt the absolute emptiness that comes with losing your heart, your soul and your life. Blank eyes stared out into the dark forest. Her body had gone numb long ago, her arms still tenaciously wrapped around the body of her love.

The flicker of light and the muted chattering of voices through the trees brought her out of her stupor. She tried to shift to sit up, commanding taut muscles to move. Cracked lips opened, her voice barely able to croak out "Over here!" The rustling and cracking of branches and leaves being pushed aside grew louder until finally, Denny, the stable master, appeared, torch in hand and shouted to the others. "HERE!" He crouched beside them, immediately checking jer love's wrist for a pulse. He knew before he even touched him. His eyes darted to her, emotion almost overwhelming him. "Are ye alrigh', miss?" Her lips trembled. She wanted to nod her head to assure him she wasn't physically injured but all she could do was burst out crying.

Others arrived and the rest was a blur. She clung to Corbin, refusing to let go of him. They pleaded, they cajoled. Finally they had to physically take him from her arms, she cried, clinging to his hand until his fingers finally slipped from hers for the last time. Her fingers curled around his ring, his family crest as they took his covered body away. The sobs that wracked her body sent her to her knees and there she stayed for a very long time. Her heart ripped out and her soul bared, pleading with the gods to return her love or end her life.

The woman that had once given her heart freely and willingly had changed. The warmth of her eyes had been replaced by a cold, disdainful glint. The once soft spoken woman was gone, replaced by a woman warrior that kept her emotions firmly in check. Never again would she be the weeping woman on the forest floor. Never again would she give herself freely only to have that part ripped violently from her. She may have to live but she damn sure didn't have to love.
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Postby Bayn on Mon Sep 08, 2003 1:40 pm

wow...that WAS sad, Chelsea. Very well done too, I could feel the panic and sorrow and eventual coldness of spirit. You say you don't write well but you do!

Ach, the pain of loss. It can overwhelm us and control our lives beyond our imagining. You expressed that so well.

I should post my own "loss" story. I wrote it the other night. But, I think I shall wait.
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Postby Aran Dragonblood on Mon Sep 08, 2003 6:40 pm

*wipes Tear from eye* Claps! Very well done Chelsea, Very well done indeed.
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Postby Marius the Black on Mon Sep 08, 2003 9:56 pm

I was lucky enough to read this one before it went public. I have to admit, when I read it again I felt all the sadness I did for the first time. It takes a good writer to instill such powerful feelings to such words, and manage to keep them there, no matter how many times you read the story!

Congratulations to Cheslea, GM wordsmith! :twisted:

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Postby Belle Remings on Mon Sep 08, 2003 10:02 pm

An excellent story Chelsea. Very well written. :)
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Postby Angelique Vero on Mon Sep 08, 2003 11:00 pm

Brava, Chelsea. Brava! That was too good. *sniffles* I have to go buy some more kleenexs now.. :cry:
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Postby Adonis on Tue Sep 09, 2003 3:23 am

*tears slowly roll off my face, as I watch the lady*
Her form bent over, her crys still ringing in my ears.
The deepth of the moans cut thru my body, my heart
jerked and tried to stop. The pain flowed over the
forest, animals stopped and wepted. It was all I could do to remount my horse. Holding the horses main
in my hand watching and watching. My breath finally came and I yell "Gods up above help this lady".
Her last cry came out and it was a blade to my heart.
Then I knew she was empty and without love, shaking
my weaken body slowly fell over my horse neck.
He knew the way home yet, he moved with the care
of one carrying eggs to the market.

Moaning as I looked upward from the ground, I acked and felt cold. My eyes caked with dirt and
my throat dry and hurting. Thoughts of last night
rang thru my head then my body, pain without end
shaking me. Closed my eyes to stop the pain coming
into my brain. Passions flowed thru me as your
imagination couldnt bear, that last cry would not
leave my head nor my soul. I looked upward and
gave a cry to answer her pain.

Your soul was complete
soaring through the sky of dreams and happines
Now your soul is in turmil and dark like a strom
Raindrops fall like tears of pain

Her life was a flower
grew proudly from a hope filled ground
The sun now has left her
Without its light and love her soul is dead

Love was everlasting,darkness covering her soul
complete without making a sound
Now the smile cold and eyes pericing
What that was once warm is now cold

Where there was love and warmth
a scar of lif's torment and despair
A treasure a lustful gift given
now taken a searing wound deep
Flawed and cold the heart of lost love.

Adonis
I loved your story very much it touched me
which I hope you see.
Just telling you it was great for tears fell from
my eyes left me in sllence.
I hope this in some small way shows you how I
felt *slowly walks away*
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Postby Chelsea Duklain on Tue Sep 09, 2003 3:44 am

Oh my gosh, you guys are SO nice! I never considered myself a very good writer or much of a story teller but when the muse hits, I think we all become something we're not for a short amount of time. Just knowing that the readers felt what I was trying to convey and actually liked it...is such a bonus! You guys sure know how to make a person feel wonderful. Thank you very much for all your compliments. I'm practically beaming right now.

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Postby Trakas on Tue Sep 09, 2003 7:50 am

that was amazing i was very moved good work keep it up
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